中秋节啦，同学们是不是都暂时抛弃雅思，捧着油澄澄的月饼与亲朋好友在欢度这个无聊又熟悉的节日呢？今天，石家庄朗欧教育为同学们总结了一些雅思写作当中常见的错误，赶紧来学习吧。
今天我们就来看看一些 introduction（开头段里面）常见的错误：
Elders have old ways of living, thinking and behaving.
到底是谁告诉你elders是可以替换老年人的呀？真是作孽！不如改成the elderlyor elderly people
Many people having differing views on how to reduce traffic accidents. Some people think that harsh punishments would work most efficiently, while others suggest that ….
句子都对了！套句也套了起来，可是请问头一句和第二句话到底有什么关系呢！
小朗也要咆哮了！有关系你就说出来啊！没有关系你写什么写！这里第二句很明显是头一句的具体化，为什么不带上to be more specific/precise, 之类的表达呢？
Today, fathers choose to take care of their children at home.
句子好像也没错啊！但是是谁告诉你所有的爸爸都带小孩呢？你是在和考官通过言语讨论，而不是给他下定义！为什么不改成many fathers？虽然还是语气上too strong，但是至少避免了以偏概全。
In my opinion, although strict punishments are a crucial and effective measure to reducing the rate of traffic accidents, ….
这位同学此时肯定在偷笑。
嘿嘿嘿，终于知道to也可以做介词了，当表达具有方向性的时候，to是介词。
句子语法是对了！可是可是可是！根本没有人这样说话和写作！！！！！
我们先来记住take measures to do sth，那既然要变形就应该是In my opinion, although strict punishments are a crucial and effective measure that can be taken to reduce traffic accidents, ….
或者同学可以考虑一下require这个词啊。
The reduction in the number of traffic accidents may require strict punishments.
同学们要记住，好的文章结构逻辑都重要，但是没有好的内容，所有的逻辑和结构都是纸老虎！先问问自己写的是英文吗？不要为了学习结构而硬塞语言，这样只会写的东西既生硬又俗气！所以从今天开始，学习精致英文吧！
