托福独立写作，在结构上面，与大多数英语类考试的作文题一样，都包括开头、主体和结尾。
今天就带着一些例子来为大家解答一下。
独立写作开头示例
我们先来看一些开头的例子，大家可以看看他们是否存在什么问题？
Topic1
Parents are the best teachers. When I see the tpoic on the screen, I feel very happy because it is an interesting topic and l have many things to say about it. I have a good relationship with my parents, and I think they are my best teachers.
分析：
我们先看topic1,话题是关于父母是否是好的老师的。这个开头的例子的前一句完全是没有必要的，非常啰嗦。
Topic2
Television has destroyed communication among friendsand family. Television influence our life greatly, but I am not true if it do destoryed communication among friends and family.
分析：
再看topic2,话题是关于电视毁坏家人朋友之间的交流。托福独立写作是个立论文，所以我们的观点肯定是需要立起来的，所以像topic2这样的开头，态度模糊不清的，是不可取的开头方式。
Television is one of the most important inventions in the last century，apart from this invention.
many other electric appliances are also invented. These inventions all influence our life greatly.
分析：
再看这个例子，我们会发现作者的谈论话题已经从电视扩大到很多的发明了。那么这就偏题了,题目只是问到电视机，把话题范围自行扩大也是需要避免的问题。
Topic3
Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance? We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: "Know is know, don' t know is don't know.
分析：
每个国家都有自己的谚语，直译中文谚语，往往是不对的。比如"知之则知之，不知则不知"。直译变成"Know is know, don’ t know is don' t know", 是不符合英文的谚语表达的。所以万不可自己直译谚语，而要积累英语本身的谚语。如果不知道准确表达，不用谚语也没问题。
Topic 4
The solution to the traffic problem
I think it is very easy to solve the traffic problem. For those who don't obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that,I' m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.
分析：
我们再看一个例子，话题是对于交通拥堵的解决。我们会发现作者的表达过于主观，有点不科学。作者说对于那些不遵守交通规则的人就都丢到监狱里面去。相信这样做了，就没人会不遵守交通规则了。
托福写作要求合理，那么合理就建立在一定的客观度上面，作者如果非常主观得表达出正常人都能看出来不合理的观点，这个作文写的就有问题。
从上面我们可以看出，对于开头，大家常犯的有下面5种错误:
1.啰嗦，表达重复
2.观点不明确;
3.偏题;
4.中式表达、谚语篡改;
5.观点武断、科学性错误
托福独立写作的开头要点是开门见山， 观点明确。我们就一起来改改topic1中的这个例子:
Parents are the best teachers. When I see the tpoic on the screen, I feel very happy because it is an interesting topic and l have many things to say about it. I have a good relationship with my parents, and I think they are my best teachers.
修改后：
It is undeniable that parents have a great influence on their chiIdren. However，It is not true that they must be the best teachers for children. Actually，teachers in schools are often better teachers for these children, especially on the aspect of academic study.
所以在做修改练习的时候，大家可以遵循开门见山，观点明确的基本原则，适当练习，写作能力就肯定会有所提高的!
